Critic #1: Yiran Ni
Emulation feedback: She thinks the color model really matches both of my models. And the real photograph matched my visual language model. She preferred the version 2 better because it looks more clear with the timeline. She suggested me to change the circle background to be white and the outline color to be black to make the annotation text inside the circle more stand out. In addition, she suggest me to align them more like a tilted or 90 degree horizontal line. And she also suggested me to add bullet point to the details to make the information more organized and clear.
I tried to change the color of my circle but I ended up not changing it because it makes the circle a bit too stand out, and it doesn't match to background and my color model. I changed all the photograph and text to make them line more organized. For the bullet point, I couldn't really find credible information about the weight and height for a few stages of the giant panda baby. But I wrote the subtitle for these features as "Characteristic" to make those paragraph more stand out.
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Critic #2:ZK
Emulation feedback: Prefer the version 2 better because the tilted photograph icons are lining up together, and it looks much more clear than the version 1, and the title is more stand out than the version 1. She pointed out the dashed lines, real photograph and circles matched my visual language model. She suggested me to try to make the circle size grow bigger and bigger throughout the timeline. And she thought the paragraph or the lines are bit tilted.
i didn't make the circle size grow bigger and bigger because when I tried to do this, the timeline will lose its consistency. I also changed the dashed line under the subtitle to make the subtitle more stand out.
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Critic #3: Jeff
Emulation feedback: He thought the version 1 really matched my visual language model and color model. And the space that left under each dashed line created the like a timeline road for the viewer. He liked the version 2 better because of the consistencies with days on the top and number on the bottom for those circles. And he suggested me to have a more aligned tilted line for those timeline elements. He also pointed out the version 2 matched my color model and visual language model.
I revised my version 2 timeline graph. And I did make all the elements in a more organized tilted line, and I think it looks much better and consistent than before.
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Critic #1: Monica
Emulation feedback: She thinks the timeline theme is very clear because of the title and the pictures of the panda. She pointed out the dashed lines, and title matches the banner match my visual language model. She suggest me change the day 7 picture because the background of pandas for day 7 has the blanket. She thought the my timeline matches my color model, and maybe add more white color into it.
I changed the photograph of the day 7 of giant panda, and the new one doesn't have a blanket. So, it looks much better now. I added more white color by changing the fun fact part text to white color.
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Critic #2: Soobin
Emulation feedback: She liked my revision one better, and she thought the images become smaller looks good because looking at t he circle of the time is more important than the photograph of pandas. She also pointed out my timeline matched my visual language model with real photograph and circles. She suggested me to smooth out the line for the photograph, and maybe change another photo for Day 7 because it is very boxy looking.
I smoothed the edge around the photographs of giant pandas. And it looks much better. I also changed the day 7 picture of panda without the boxy looking blanket. And I think it looks much more consistent now.
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Time Element & Critiques
Critic #3: Elyse
Emulation feedback: The first thing she noticed is the growing process title, and she thought it really matched to all my models. She suggested me to consider maybe making the photograph size from small to big. She also suggested me to crop the day 7 picture. And she thought the Month 3 looks kinda fake, and suggest me might want to change it. She also thought maybe making the circle smaller, in order to match my visual language model. And she thought adding fun fact for how many days it takes for panda to be a grown up panda would be interesting.
I didn't make the photograph size from small to big because it looks not as consistent as before. I changed the picture of day 7 instead of cropping it, and I also update the month 3 picture to a more real one. I also made the circle smaller to match more like my visual language model. I also added the fun fact for the number of days for a panda to be grow up.
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In this timeline, I want to show the viewer about the fragile growing process of giant panda with real photographs. The viewer can have a better understanding of how pandas look like that shows the looking difference in different stage of giant panda. With the text below the title, the viewer can realize how hard it is for giant panda baby to grow.
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How this element exploits the visual potential of time: I used real photographs of pandas in different days to show how baby panda's looking changing over time.
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How this element emulates the models:
To emulate my color model, I used black color for the text and the dashed lines. I also used different green colors for the circles.
To emulate my visual language model I used the different photographs and the glow around the picture for the photo of the just born panda and the fully grown panda. I also used dashed lines and circles to emulate more from my visual language model.
To emulate my typography model I used the same font for the annotation and paragraph text of my typography model.
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